Blog Post Assignment #2

Since my learning of the proper ways to write an essay, I've noticed that in some areas I am wrong. I am mostly struggling with my usage of the word "you" in various parts of my writings. In an informal essay, it would be okay to use it as much because I am informing someone of how to do something or stating something to that person. Yet, in a formal essay, the correct way to approach a topic, would be to state things in general. Such as by using words like "one" or "he or she" without directlyplan ting it toward on person. I plan to get better at this by inserting different words in place of the word "you" that could be written for a general audience. In other words, I am over all a pretty good writer. My writings provide many important details about the main topics that I discuss. The structures of my writings are well thought out and my transitions are well executed. With time and dedication, I will only progress.

Introduction

Hey everyone, my name is Allayia Brown. I am very antisocial and mostly keep to myself. The few people I do associate with know that I am a very outspoken, goofy, and chill person. For fun, I like to sing, write, and listen to music. Music has always played a major role in my life growing up. When I was younger, I used to want to be a singer. My favorite and most beloved entertainer is Michael Jackson. I have to at least listen to a song, watch a video, or look at a picture of his on a daily basis. To this day, I still dream of visiting the Neverland Ranch. Now that I am older, I've come across a different occupation that I would like to pursue, other than singing. After graduating from college, I want to be a pharmacist. Though science isn't really my strongest area of work, there's something in me that just won't let me get pass the thought of being a pharmacist. I feel as if it's what I am meant to do and I know that I'm going to have to work hard in order for that to happen. With that being said, hopefully the teachers at B.C Rain high school can help me get prepared for what ever my future may hold.